Lingerie's too detailed and concrete compared with the looseness of the rest of the composition.
The visible lines on the bra don't convey a concrete perspective, making the breasts look flat.
If the breasts are pulling on the bra, the strap shouldn't be as slack.
The top of the further breast looks too full and being bordered by the strap of the bra doesn't read well.
The silhouette of the back smoothly turning into the viewer-facing breast doesn't make any sense.
The shadow of the head and snout on the breast does not follow the form, leading to the breast reading even flatter and the pit of the neck reading deeper in the chest than one would expect.
The eyes are too big and don't sit in the skull.
The snout is placed crookedly on the face and is asymmetric.
The specific tones of green and purple used do not sit well in the more subdued colors of the rest of the composition.
The hair on top of the head looks very busy and the lines make the forehead look like it's not as far forward as it ought to be.
The hair being depicted as parallel lines without any clear source of origin looks offputting and unnatural.
The sporadic use of shading makes unshaded parts look either unfinished or in incorrect lighting; the body thus looks shrunken and not receding into the distance.
The lack of a background with perspective cues further accentuates any unclear directionality of the figure.
The forearm looks swollen, particularly closer to the wrist.
The inside of the viewer-facing ear being more visible than the outside rim of the ear does not make sense considering the silhouette and direction of the hair that's covering it up.
The very selective and inconsistent use of line weight makes the picture less cohesive than it could be.
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